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Citrine Sharp 5/14/04 . chapter 1Ya... its safe to say that... I can't spell at all. *laughs* Don't worry either I'm not offended, hear corrections enough I've grown used to them. I agree with everything you've said though, just so you know. The biggest reason I make those stupid mistakes is because I write them quickly... in 5-10 minutes spans. |
Ambvai 5/11/04 . chapter 1Good job- I certainly enjoyed it. Not too much to say on the technical front, though I have a personal liking for the comma-period-comma-period style in quatrains. A few typos/notes on word choice if you're not offended. (Of course, all can be explained away by stylistic decisions. ) ) I find that "Til" or "'til" usually looks better than "Till" in my opinion. Line 9- Maybe a comma before "it" or remove the word "it"? Line 11- Maybe a comma after "Still"? Line 13- "hear" instead of "here" maybe? Line 15- Pretty safe to say it's supposed to be "Ignored"? Line 20- "you're" instead of "your"? Sorry about the editing, but I found it an enjoyable poem and couldn't resist the slight patches. ) |
Angelic Hellraiser 5/11/04 . chapter 1Exactly! I love it! Great job! |