Wow, very… mysterious to put it plainly. This is very well done. I’d like to invite you to a writing forum. I hope you enjoy the community and share some of your interesting works.
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This is absolutely fantastic. It would make a good movie. Very interesting and a bit humorous. I love the way it's written, too.

Sorry It took me so damned long to reply to your review its just that I have been quite busy and my comp is a piece of dung. But your works are great...thank you for the constructive criticsm. I have a new story up if you'd like to read it. I will finish it up because that is like the only story I really think Ill Finish.
Your Fellow Writer,
Armadelus Demien
P.S. About the last name thing Most of the names were connected at one time like Demien and Derolequare were one family but seperate branches.

this was so well done! so creepy and well described!!