Like the boots, they are super cool, kinda remind me of something i would put in a book, well sorta, great read, i like this story alot

I really like this ol gal, it reminds me sorta of Logans run meets pilgrims progress, great mix!

The ending paragraph was beautiful! I really enjoyed the creative plot of this story, the characters had nice, varied personalities and Dawson was perfect D

I'm glad everyone was happy and that both sides are now united...

The pace of Dawson and Neela's relationship seems to be going rather quick, but it's still sweet (I love Dawson to bits).

I'm happy that Christopher proposed!

And one of them can make food with magic..? *Imagines a war with flying donuts* Well, I suppose it has its deadly side... Hehe.

*Faints* AW! They told each other!

Wonderfully written chapter btw! The way you described the atmosphere in the dance was outstanding! I'm going to read more when I have spare time!

I have a feeling I'm spamming you with reviews - but...

"Right now, the door was the lucky one." Oh my days... That made me laugh so much! I can't believe a knight such as Christopher can possibly be jealous of a DOOR.

I found Dawson funny too; "I don't see why not. I rather enjoyed it." He nearly died, and instead of being shaken; he's flirting..?

I thought Jud was going to shoot them for a moment...

What a busy chapter! I hope Aislinn and Christropher won't get hurt or something...

I adored the ending in this chapter! Out of all the things I predicted; it was not a glowing kiss!

I hope Dawson is fine...

Im going to have to sleep now... I'll read the rest tomorrow!

Dawson seems like a really charming guy... I also love Aislinn and Christopher's relationship!

I love Aislinn! She's so adorable and aw, she kissed him! Im really liking the differences in their cities!

Hehe, I loved her reaction with the fire! I love how naiive she seems to be at this life - its adorable!

Im liking Christopher's personality aswell!

I love how you described freedom with Christopher, it makes me want to randomly frolic around gardens...

Dang it, she can FLY?

Woah.

The city sounds very controlling at the moment... No marriage? And religion is worse than murderers? Wow. Im loving this so far, its really creative!

I like this so far! I loved the summary cos it immediately hooked me in and Im glad that the first chapter is hooking (is that a word?) aswell!

I'll be reading the rest of this soon!

Since you were six years old...? Wow, thats a really early age to be writing D

Oh! What an intresting beginging. I will be sure to carry on reading! Love it!

I think this is a pretty good first chapter but I think an improvement would be to put a page break between Aislinn flying at the criminal and her boss yelling at her. The way you have it formatted right now is confusing because one event flows into the other without a distinction between the two. The content is good but I think that one change would be great!