Really Stinkin GOOD! WOW!! I LOVE THE LAST CHAPTER!!. That's my favorite among all the others. Especially when she went to heaven. SO LOL! Good Luck on your book! My Dad writes books and it really is hard getting it published. Much more sold. You should post a picture on what they look like when they are finished.

JUST finished re-reading! I dont know if you're still editing, but here are some quick thoughts:

in you bio, you mention the dragons being an issue. I agree. you might want to either incorporate them more into the story or get rid of them. I'd say you use dragons relatively well, almost as well as the pern books... but it does seem derivative of them, and even the pern books occasionally seem like the dragosn are just thrown in as deus-ex-machinas and "cute" characters. so... it needs work.

thought two: the Inuyasha influence is a bit too obvious haha. I would rework the characters a bit more, though its not necessary. i read this years ago, but I was still able to pinpoint many of the characters' fandom counterparts.

that being said, I dont really mind.

thought three: the discrimination against women was like... fine, but the way jerik was just like "let me tell you the history of it" seemed a tad dull. would have preferred to have it revealed more subtly through actions and thoughts, as you do throughout anyway. it seemed a bit annoying at first like, UGH, I'M A GIRL AND I CAN DO ANYTHING YOU CAN DO... BETTER THAN YOU! GIRLPOWERGIRLPOWER kind of thing... is that fair to say? its okay if you disagree with me.

towards the end, the discrimination factor and her own "super powers" got more natural. I dont know if it was me accustoming (is that a word?) to it or you writing it more naturally, but hey.

not that I mind girl power. I don't... it just seemed forced... haha.

my final criticism would have to be the color changing eyes. I get why you did this, but I just really find it difficult to take a story seriously when characters have color changing eyes.

I dont mean to be offensive haha. I love this story a lot. I just think that it would show more writing maturity if you showed emotions through body language and stuff instead of eye color. like... eyes as mood rings... weird.

in any case, this is a wonderful story. very well thought out and touching. it really takes me back! I was surprised, because as I read, I slowly remembered all the little details. thank you for writing and for keeping it posted online!

are you making edits? is there an edited version I could read online, or are you going for publishing?

bye! hope you write more. you are immensely talented.

wow! this is some story! i have never been so into a story before!

you know, i'm probably one of those few people who does not hate Laise. I can kinda understand her need to be perfect, and also the desperation she feels about not having a soul- but besides making me mad when I see how far she'll go to ruin Lethya- I mainly feel pity for her. I think the idea is great, but grammar is something that irks me just a bit. Don't worry too much though, I'm not exactly an english professor.

O It't the end, it's really the end. Really though, the whole war and everything had my adrenaline going real bad and I swear I love the trilogy to pieces. I am going to have to re read this later on in my life. Jaegar really did amuse me at points, such as the whole magenta cocktail umbrella XD and then asking for puce coloured...
You did good, real good, I liked how the characters were brought out and shaped, I truly hated Laise until her spirit came to talk, all I could think was 'JUST DIE ALREADY'
I will definately buy this if you get it published and now after this you have provoked me into loving the trilogy forever (If I've mentioned already I really don't care) and I'm going to go read your other works of art... tata

I never think I can love this story more... and then I read it again! I fell in love with Transcending a Dynasty way back when it was an IY fic, and am faithfully waiting for it to be published. I wanted, first and foremost, to take the time to again commend you on an absolutly beautiful story!

I do have a few questions (since your profile says you're editing, I thought I might point these out) : Lawrence bonded to a dragon, but we never hear about it again, including when he gets taken. Wouldn't Lethya have asked Jerik if the dragon knew anything about the missing people?

There was also the problem of Ander "seeing" Auras. I'm not sure if you mentioned it at the beginning, but it really didn't make an appearence until they were in the Forest of Hours. I remembered Inuyasha "scenting" Kagome, and realized it must be a substitute for that, but it still took several chapters for me to get what was going on. You might want to clear that up a bit earlier. In fact, I don't even think auras are mentioned at all before that, though it does say later that Lethya can sense them. Try to work that little detail in sooner too.

Another thing was the female refugees at V.E.O. A big deal is made about everyone wondering whether they would be taking all the same classes as the boys or not, and what suddenly having several hundred girls in the school would do. You would think boys would be asking Lethya for advice and to put a good word in for them and such. I could pretty much guess that they didn't get to learn to fight, but it's never specifically adressed.

And the transition of the medic in the forest who replaced Shippou in and out of the story could have been smoother - it was pretty jarring.

I tried to find little things, that had maybe escaped your notice (heaven knows I never notice the litle things in my stories). Of these, the only one that caused any real harm to my reading was the aura issue, and that was more of a "huh?" than "i'm tearing my hair out because I don't know what's going on!".

Again, I worship the ground you walk on, and cannot WAIT until this book is published!

holy crap I loved this story! You are and amazing writer. I only wished I could write as well. It was awsomely done. Kudos!

I recently re-discovered this trilogy; I remember reading it back when it was still Transcending a Dynasty in fanfiction form (and enjoying it very, very much).

It is one of the most entertaining pieces of writing I have read on these sites, so far. However, I took note of your profile and the fact that you are going to be revising quite a lot. While your characters are artfully written and amazingly loveable, the observations you made are correct and, I believe, will improve the story to no end.

I look forward to the updates - I want to see just how different TAD will be. :)

And in response to one of the reviews below about their claims as a writer and publisher, I wish that illiterate imbecile a good day and may they rot in grammar hell. And I whole-heartedly agree with "Your Personal Pep-R..."(it cut the name off); go for it! If Eragon can be published, then TAD (which has a much higher sense of originality, an actual plot, and amusing characters - not some random junkie bite-off of Tolkien) most definitely can!

~Jessica

I have to say, i love your villian. He's so... insane. But with that weird politeness that makes him seem all the stranger. I have a thing for interesting villains, and Jaegar rocks.

I read this story even though I didn't think I could like the changes that you made. I loved this story as a fanfiction and didn't think I could like it as an original piece. However you have proved me wrong. I loved this story. You did a beautiful job making the characters your own. If you ever publish this as a book I will buy it. This story really stands on it's own as an original story and not a fanfiction. I look forward to reading more of your stories. I hope you continue to write because you are very talented. I am glad you proved me wrong.

Alright, this has to be one of the weirdest things, really. I just finished reading TAD Saturday (I swear it did!), and came back to review. I figured that after a year, I'd read it again, and give feedback on a different perspective. Then I read your bio, and it said that you were rewriting it, it must have made me the happiest person in the world for a moment because that means I can read it yet AGAIN! I've read this story three times including the original ver. and I don't think that I'll ever get tired of it.

Anyway, I'll get to the feedback, and hope that it'll help you in the rewriting.

I'll say that you were right about Ander and the discrimination; it does need a bit more depth. I mean, everyone, story characters and readers alike, don't really care that Ander's a Levitator after the first few chapters, and then a few chapters in between. I would say, not to worry too much about the woman's rights thing in here, I think that I plays out quite nicely. Though, there was one thing that got me, Maia and the Dragon Ship. She's not suppose to be able to ride them, so when they were transporting refugees to V.E.O. I thought that she had to have been giving a bit of a problem with the Higher Ups, unless she’s been able to fly them and the readers don’t know it (sorry that was confusing, but I didn’t know how else to word it).

If you are rewriting TAD, I, as a reader, I would like to see more of Jerik and Tyra’s relationship, well more detail of the beginnings of it, seeing as it doesn’t really form until a ways to the end, same with Maia and the Emperor’s. Ander and Lethya, and Ander and Laise’s relationship was wonderfully established and I have no complaints about it. The relationships between Lethya, Laise, and Maia, both past and present, was also great.

Um… what else? I know there’s more I want to say, but I can’t really remember it with the review screen in front of me. So, I’ll go home and think about it some more, then get back to you. I guess I’m still too weirded out to read you bio after I just finished reading your story. It was quite funny too, because even if this story’s finished, I would have still given you my opinion, though maybe not in quite such detail.

Anyway, I have to go now and I hope to get back to you, and I also hope that I haven’t offended you.

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~VGT~

These three stories were absolutely the best I have read on theis site so far. I loved the plot line and especially Jerik's comic releif. I'm so glad Ander and Lethya can finally get together. Please contiune writing and posting on the net where I can find you.

I am almost in tears. I loved this trilogy. It was amazing. And now I will go make my friends read it. Because I can't find words to explain how wonderfully you crafted all of the characters and I'm in love with it and I'm hoping that one of them can do it better then I am. Even though I'm failing. So it wouldn't be all that amazing.

~ Melody

How come in chapter two (of this story), when she was talking with the High Souls she didn't remember it, but then later at the end, she remembered all that happened? Just wondering!

-Me

Sorry, but couldn't help but notice that the last person to review this story claimed to be a writer and publisher, and discouraged you from publishing.

Personally, if this so called "publisher" can't even spell "truly" correctly, or remember to capitalize his or her I's, then his opinion should therefore be void.

You go for it girl--it never hurts to try. Plus, that Aragon book got published, and that had to be the WORST piece of trash I ever had the misfortune of picking up. So, if he could, why not you? ^_^

Rooting for you all the way,

A Loyal Fan