Reviews for Perpetual Flow
Frodo13 4/27/05 . chapter 1
so true, thanks for writing it...it's beautiful
Melancholy Butterfly 6/28/04 . chapter 1
A wonderful haiku conveying such truth and wisdom! Time is indeed too precious to waste, and I can tell you that the time you used to write to though provoking haiku for all to read was time well spent.
Mime 6/5/04 . chapter 1
That's true...but every second deserves to be treated as eternity, because one second is all it takes to seal someone's fate for eternity-*mind is on basketball* AGH, THE LAKERS'VE BETTER WIN AGAINST DETROIT! Y'know maybe I shouldn't be saying this in a review. -_-;;
Anyhow, FABULOUS job. *cheers*
glitterjewele 6/3/04 . chapter 1
very nice! it seems you're just as good with haikus as you are with longer pieces. :) this is so great. it just shines with wisdom, i mean i can see it being recited by an old chinese philosopher under a pink tree by a river. love the way the first line reads, the movement in it is great. and then when you contemplate the action of treating each second as eternity, it adds so much power to the piece overall. really fantastic work!
JJR Meerraf 5/28/04 . chapter 1
I usually don't see haikus that rhyme, so I'm not sure if that's "right" or not, but it was a welcome and surprising change that caught my attention. It made the rhythm much better and I loved the message it contained. Great work!
Hail the Warrior 5/26/04 . chapter 1
I like it, it's nice and flowy.
HtW
sheZadey 5/24/04 . chapter 1
aah its like one of those words of wisdom pieces. i like how you conveyed that message simply instead of in like 80 words- lol. nice work : o)
Miz E. Mak 5/18/04 . chapter 1
Now this is truth wrapped up in a tiny box! I love it... very awesome insight here, I hope to remember it for the rest of my days.
write on.
obsidian katana 5/15/04 . chapter 1
nice haiku. well written, insightful and profound, i like this. good job. keep writing!
Impressionist 5/14/04 . chapter 1
'differently' is a bad word to use in a haiku...because it's debatable whether it's 3 or 4 syllables. wow...i'm really too stuck on formalities. anyway. nice writing.:)
Jimmy Jazz 5/14/04 . chapter 1
I love the message, great work.
teh tarik 5/14/04 . chapter 1
Great message here. Expressed really clearly and poetically.
Children of the Root 5/13/04 . chapter 1
awesome haiku! Time is such a strange concept.
Wasted Postage 5/13/04 . chapter 1
Very true. This was perfectly wonderful. I loved it.
Excellent work!
*AbunaiChikara
the insane floo pot 5/13/04 . chapter 1
Hidy hi there my dear oh and congrats you've actually manged to out beat me in the shortest poem... eight words wow and despite the shortness you manage to convey so much, I'm fasinated with what you have to say about time such a fab read _