ich bin in deutsch drei und du schribst sehr gut. i am also learning german, and though there were some words i wasn't sure of, i think its very good and there is a lot more shown than on the suface. es ist schoen!

klingt nett, aber du brauchst doch niemanden veralbern ;)amerikaner haben keine umlaute à la ü oder ö u.s.w. also bitte *lach*

Das ist sehr toll! (I had to read it twice, cause like you german is my second lnguage.) But in ny language it is very good.

Mein Held!
I think that's right...

Ich spreche ein bischen Deutsch auch. But reading poems in German helps me learn. I like your poem a lot. Even though my understanding was limited, it flowed beautifully and what I could understand had a wonderful theme that was carried across very nicely. I especially love the ending! Das is sehr gut und schurn. (buchterbeareman ist nicht so gut, enschuldigen)

sehr gut Jaxie. one suggestion tho...when it says "hart" i think that it would sound a little bit better if you put "schwer" i dunno y. i guess i'm just not used to people using hart. lol, oh well

It's a sweet little poem - even more so, /because/ your German isn't perfect... Nice.