love it!

Wow, very… mysterious to put it plainly. This is very well done. I’d like to invite you to a writing forum. I hope you enjoy the community and share some of your interesting works.
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Awesome! Your description is incredible, the dialogue is perfect, and the plot well developed. This goes into my story list. You used the words well to make this cop belivable. Thank you for sharing this with us. Great job, keep writing!
**Slave**

Nice story! I am very honoured that someone would write a story based on one of my own. I always thought about writing a peice from the victims viewpoint. Good work!!

I believe this is a very well written piece, but it doesn't really contain much excitement - doesn't really entice an audience. Good description, just work on adding a little more "spice" to it, and it'll be great. Will read more as soon as it's added, hope I helped.