Wow, that's wierd. Very nice words and messing with the...aw...the Biblical 'blessed' passage. (i can't remember the name of it!)There's truth in here, layered with sarcasm.

Oh wow. I love this poem. It has those biting phrases like

Blessed are the traitors

For the bonds they'll never honor

that really make you think. Good job. This is one of the best I've read.

Personally, I think this poem would work a lot better as a rhyming poem. I mean, it's fine this way, but there's something about the rhythm and the repetition that calls for a rhyme scheme. Also, I noticed that you repeat a lot of verbs; I think you need to keep your wording varied unless you're repeating something on purpose. Also, I'm not sure exactly what your message is; I mean, maybe that's just me being stupid, but especially since you include the blind and the deaf, who can't help missing the things they do, the message is foggy. Maybe if you took out those verses...Anyway, this was a good concept, and there was some good word choice and rhythm in there; I just think - know - you can do better, cuz I've read some of your other stuff.

Wow, I loved this poem! I feel the same way sometimes.
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But the real reason I reviewed (other than to grade because I'm under the delusion that grading people makes them wonder... ) is to tell you that this poem is now up on my site, http://w.geocities.com/pushfrog_20/index.html!
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If you don't want me using your poem, just ask me and I'll remove it.

Everyone's blessed. Nice point, and nice idea. keep writing!

i love Jars of clay, their songs are peaceful to me.

Pretty damn cool, dude. That note you left at the bottom - does that mean you didn't write any of this? Or does it mean you didn't write the parts in italics? Either way, this is great.

Another b-e-a-u-tiful peice! I love your works and look forward to much much more from you really soon! WD xx

Wow, I absolutely loved this. So.. different in its theme. Is Jars of Clay a band?