hmm, seems more like prose to me than poetry..but it does work..I like the line comparing lunch money to oil, and I think you should add more phrases like that, stuff no one else has used to describe the situation..I also think you could perhaps cut out repeating phrases one after the other, like at the end..but maybe that's just me, I'm just giving suggestions, you don't have to take any of this if you don't want :)BTW, I completely agree. The general American is ignorant as all get out, and so when you combine all these ignorant Americans, it makes us look like we're...what's the word I'm looking for? Egotistical, powerhungry bastards, when really it's just the US government that is, and they've managed to con the American public into thinking they aren't..well, more like they've conned the ignorant American public...hence why Bush got re-elected..but yes, time for me to step off my soap box now.Oh, one more thing, instead of saying America the brave yet ignorant, maybe say American the brave, then the next line america the ignorant, just a thought, it flows better to me, but that's just me :)Okay, I need to stop apologizing and end this! :)

the point about lunch money was original and inspired - great!

You know, I should probably be offended by this, but I'm not. Afterall, I'm the first to say I'm a "stupid American."
I think the only defence for the Americans who actually see what's going on is this: "I can love my country without loving its actions."
But anyways, I should comment on your poem, right?
I assume this is pretty free form, as there isn't much for a consistent rythm and stuff. It's not bad, though. You get your message across, nice and clear. Maybe overly clear, but clear is a good thing. It's simple, but that's cool too.
Keep writing, and thanks for the review on my poem.

I found this to be the kind of "I hate the U.S. but I forget why" poems that are so common in this area. I saw a few points like the UN thing but to be brutally honest the poem didn't flow very well and didn't move me at all. You say we are wrong, but you never state what is right. Okay, I'm listening, now please, tell me.