Interesting, can't wait to see what becomes of this vampire, damn homework!! :P

Dun dun dun...

Why do you stereotype Vampires, and Goths? Why is this vampire able to walk around in daylight? It's definitly not one of the best I've written.

Ooh, me like!! Write more. If you need ideas or whatever, you know that you can come to me for them. ;)
Nikki

Hmm, it seems a little more than obvious that she's a vampire, and a very traditional one at that, and I wonder how they could not suspect something was wrong with her. I definitly would have killed her by now. Anyway, I'm intrested to see where this will go, keep writing.
happy hunting
~Midnight Predator~

Nice intro, but, it probably would have been better to space out her boyfriend's friend's discovery and the guy who hunts her. What I mean is, those topics would probably be better off as separate chapters (for instance, Ch.2 is Sylvia's discovery, and Ch.3 is that other guy's suspicions.) Other than that, great story and I'll look for more.

I love vampire fics! Your story sounds good so far, i love the names! BTW, it might help to space the paragraphs out a bit- so it's easier to read. Anyway, continue on!