That was cute, it had awesome detail! nice work

wow! nice beginning! it completely captured my attention! i don't think there's n e mistakes but ending it like that wasn't so good to me! there' better be another chapter! n u didn't even mention the girl's name! darn. oh well it's the mystery to a story i guess. bye!

That was really good! Could you do me a favor and check out some of my stuff? I'd like your opinion! Thanks! Great story.

I like it! Is this by any chance based on the Pele myth? I think you should continue it.

LOL! heh, that cracked me up. :D Hmm... I'm not good with long reviews... But I did like it!

oh! teehee! ^_^ that was funny...^^,
hmm...who could that woman be? anyway, erm, great! ^^, nice job! so there's more? well i'm looking forward for it.^^,
but i do hope you update your story "My Fading Womanhood"...well, good luck!
take care! ^^,