This is the begining of a great story, however I feel that the story being told in present tense is a little confusing at times. Past is normally the way a story is written so it takes you off guard at first, overall this is a good read though. Keep up the great work and I'll be waiting for the rest.

Hey, nice story so far. I thought I would just give you your first review. I only wish to find someone like me on this site to do the same. Otherwise, I'll get to reading the second chapter tomorrow. Keep up the good work! (by the way, I do have a story of my own in the works. Hope you can review it for me! Since us new writers need to stick together...kinda.)