You know what I think would further enhance the effect you created with the way you wrote 'shatters' vertically? Try scattering the letters across the page as well. If you do it right, it might not even be that difficult for people to read.

I have a thing about eyes, so the last sentence was hard to read! LOL Nice effect with the vertical spelling out of "shatters." No longer one word, but several broken parts of that word. Not an uplifting poem, but an effective mood piece.

wow...dark but REALLY GOOD AND WELL WRITTEN!
o, and thanx for reviewing my poem:)