oh my goodness... this is so touching. i love it. so simple, so eloquent, so meaningful. it's so sad. why would someone's parents kick their child out of the house cuz they were dating someone else? jeez. well, i still love it.

if you have time, would you mind reviewing my story, paths of destiny? i'd really appreciate your input. thanks!

"I must have stared into your eyes for a long time because you asked me when I saw."
when=>what?
Succint, well written. I like the symmetry with the first and last paragrpahy, though between the 3rd to last and 2nd to last paragraph there is a vagueness... did they elope or just have sex? It's a bit too crisp.
-Ariel

good. love it. can't say more.

Wow... That was really great. I have no words for you. I love the style of your writing. So really, you did a fantastic job!

Wow, this is so sweet. I really like it! The perfect portrayal of a love tinted by sadness. I don't know if you can believe it or not, but I think this piece is beautifully sad. I wonder if you are planning on continuing this, because I think it’s perfect as it is. Great job!