Aw... I was hoping Jay was the one to marry her, but otherwise a pretty good fic. If you'd like a little advise you should either re-read your fic's before putting them on the site or get a beta reader. I know everyone makes mistakes (I do too) but it helps you out a lot, trust me. Good first fic though!

Personally I really don't like Luke. But that's just my opinion.

Oh this reminds me of a relastionship I had not to long ago. I was dating this girl for a little while and then on V-Day her old sweet heart shows up on her door step without a card, candy or flowers.. and she ended up choosing him over me. If she chooses Luke over Jay I know how he feels..

*Dramatic gasp* Oh no!

I'm liking it so far, can't wait till I read the next one!

Uh-oh... looks like J has some competition!

I'll read Chapter 3 tomorrow.

~CDx5~

DAMN! TDG is right John! Man! What made you want to start writting fiction? Well keep it up... Just stop Writting so Good cause you're making me and cougar look bad. You're evil!! J/K! keep it up dawg... What the hell did i call you dawg for Oh well... And Risu (Cougar) says hola!

I want to know whats comming next! continue =P good luck!

Good good! Keep going! I've always had a soft spot for tragic weddings mwahaha! Um alright. update 'k? Interesting stuff so far.

Well, I may still be developing my talent at fiction, but I can cut a good story at a whim. I'm gonna throw a hunch out and say that this cliff is gonna resolve pretty quickly in the next chapter. It's just not the type of cliff that can hold a full chapter behind it. Otherwise, I liked the way the dialogue was set up, there is a lot of actual writing in between, and as always, I enjoy reading your work. The subject I can't say much for, as the term 'romance' reminds me of my ex, and terrible memories abound. Characters are simple, but I would put a little more into character development. Also, what does J stand for?
I think I carried this out way the hell too long, but I'll drop any kind of review for a friend. And, for a starting fiction writer, you're That Damn Good, just like your poetry. I look forward to reading your updates of this. How long it gets is up to you, but it is captivating, even at the first chapter. Oh, and I absolutely loved the word "yawl", as I usually spell it "y'all", so this was a refreshing change. And finally, this story is the first, ever, to grace my favorite stories list.
Check, check, check...
LiL Angel with Wings writes better than most ever could
And that's why I say that she is That Damn Good!
~CDx3~
P.S. If you want to check out the way I write fiction at my best, check out Coconut Alley. Chapter 2 is my best work ever, in my opinion. Peace!