that was AMAZING! i loved it. you wrote with real skill and talent. everything flowed so perfectly, and the rhymes weren't irrelevant or forced as they so often are, only very talented people manage to write GOOD poetry which includes rhyming. Well done! :) By the way, i enjoyed the subtle references to 'Uncle America' or the American dream of friendly old Uncle Sam with his capitalism and such

Hi, this is Platypi - I want to thank you for reviewing a number of my pieces recently, and I'd like to review some of your pieces back, but I recall that you care about some pieces more than others. Have any in particular you'd like me to look at? Contact me at my e-mail address or in a reply to this review.

"Good" doesnt seem like an accurate word to describe this...not that it isnt, it just seems too deep and yet beautiful to describe as such. The concepts are tangible and the wording is clear yet multi-faceted...
I think it's ingenious.