I notice that you've typed "fiercely" as "fiercly", watch out! :)
I'm glad that you've mentioned Apollo and his golden chariot. I love Greek myths, though I haven't read them for quite a long time.

I really liked your story, including the ending, it reminds you that sometimes in reality you don't get happy endings. But it doesn't stop you feeling sorry for them, sniffs, such a sad ending. Maybe you should do a sequel showing what happens to Timon and does he invade Crete again in the future?? Hm interesting... anyways thanks for the story it was great! =D

I really liked your story, including the ending, it reminds you that sometimes in reality you don't get happy endings. But it doesn't stop you feeling sorry for them, sniffs, such a sad ending. Maybe you should do a sequel showing what happens to Timon and does he invade Crete again in the future?? Hm interesting... anyways thanks for the story it was great! =D

Hmm.. I guess it was an alright story, although I would have liked a happy ending. Maybe a sequel?

wow, this story was so sad and tragic. A lost love. I really like our writing style. Great story! :)

--Alex

Wow. What a wonderful refreshing story! This was also great first chapter. I couldn't find anything wrong with it.

-Nina

Gr! I love you and hate you at teh same time! I am so sad! I cannot imagine how you felt writing this. I would have cried. I owuld have burst into tears and cried.

I love Timon. The way that you make him act like a lord one day and the Prince the next really changes things. Its also good that you sorta make hims seem like the bad guy, you know? I want to believe that he is good, but there is always something new that makes me change my mind. I go back and forth! I just can't decide.

I LOVE this story! Its grippin! AND I didn't even guess that the man would end up being teh Prince! What an amazing twist!

Excellent story, but she most definitely could have gone with him. You are just evil and malicious. :P

You should have labeled your story as angst.

m i think the fic could have been developed better it seemed rushed and didn't really get all of the points across but i've read worse

just wanted to say that i really loved the way it turned out.
i agree very much on the issues regarding Lena and Timon, that they should be separated and that their love would be a bittersweet one.
the Story was Great! and i dont think any other ending would have done it justice.
too many happy endings give us too much comfort sometimes.

:D

That's a wonderfull Story you wrote!!
The End was so emotional i had to cry.
Very touching and tragic Story but still wonderful!!