Awesome. Moving. The only thing I saw was the use of an exlamation (two in fact) coupled with a question mark. I think it would be best to pick one. I must say Fallon is thus far my favorite character. Can't wait to see how you develop him.

This is pretty good. Add the next chapter soon.

Aww. you are so cute. I love you. Write until you are 85. Or until you get arthritis.
But before that, review my Snape story, woman. ;) It's getting good.

I enjoyed reading it, it's similar to your LJ updates in the sense that you've got such a great vocabulary. It's also got a nice flow. Also note I love anything about newscasters, especially the ones with mega-watt grins.

Mimi. I love you. You are such a good writer! Did you ever update the Pirates story? Yeah...I love your style of writing. It's very...down to earth in a way, and you use great vocabulary to express it. Love you :-*
Sue