I really likes this, it's very truthful about a subject people like to exaggerate about... good job!

I truely feel guilty in my constand dissaproval of your actual writting format, but as usual I would say that a few words could be changed or the odd one moved. But lets put that aside for there is far more to writting than writting.

As somone mentioned, the pace is perfect for the subject. Also, being that I have experienced situations similar to the one you wrote about, I couldn't agree more that true romance is a matter of perception, or more acurately in the case of romance and your story...the lack there of. A constant with you is that you write about real live experiences, ones felt and had by many, yet ones that are often forgotten, or left unapreciated. I must say that my appretiatation for the times like those in this particular piece that I have experienced, have now been recognized as the spectacular experiences, and fond memories that they truely are. Not for the first time, thank you for the pleasure.

- Vigilant

Beautiful. I liked it a lot. I liked the spacing and the pace. The first line "brightest darkness".. nice. Well done. Thanks for the review, much appreciated. sos

very nice job!! I really enjoyed this piece, it was short but so true. enuf was said

I like! Great descriptions I especially liked the line "A sweet touch of lips followed by a fiery lash" . Very evocative. Keep it up!