|Reviews for Watery Mouth|
| tofujunky 6/5/04 . chapter 1
Yowzer! That was hot. You have knack for teasing us readers, don't you?
My reactions while reading:
"My eyes alight upon you / And it is as a drop of water on my parched tongue"
*Arches right eyebrow*
"It saturates the skin and spreads / Melting all matter, until there is none."
*Arches both eyebrows*
"The warm liquid seeps through the cracks of my lips / It submerges my paper heart and rolls down my throat."
*Jaw slightly falling*
"You give new meaning to the term, 'My mouth waters.'"
"I swallow the water and choke."
*shakes head and laughs*
| CydCharisse 5/31/04 . chapter 1
I don't think I quite grasped this one...but it was very descriptive, and I liked the final line. Woo! *claps*
| lifescrewsusall 5/30/04 . chapter 1
I was deffinatly drooling by the end of the poem...
| Seeker of the Way 5/30/04 . chapter 1
Great extended metaphor and unique! It is so great!
| til-iburnout aka Amanda Helton 5/29/04 . chapter 1
| xXxskysthelimitxXx 5/28/04 . chapter 1
keep your eye on the ball. we were watching the sand lot in music at school at the phrase mouth waters kinda reminded me of that. Creepy part in law and order...Well can't wait for more.
| WarriorHeart 5/28/04 . chapter 1
Awesome. I loved how the poem gave you a sense of warmth(?) right up until that last line! Great words mi amiga.
| simpleplan13 5/28/04 . chapter 1
not a very happy ending.. I guess meant to foreshadow a bad relationship.. very different meaning of the phrase
| mizu no kokoro 5/28/04 . chapter 1
...Hee... Food! :D :D :D :D :D
| catseyeview 5/28/04 . chapter 1
ooh, this is very interesting. At first I thought this was a very romantic piece, my eyes alight upon you and like water this person quenches a parch skin, mouth, lips, even the paper heart, but then in the end you choke on this water. Very creative! very smart.
| Semi-charmed life 5/28/04 . chapter 1
wow. So descriptive, wow. Great job, im impressed. Keep writing and check out some of my stuff if u'd like