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| E.S. Lundgren 2006-05-30 ch 6,  | abuseout of chapters five and six, six is my favorite, it's beautiful, and the repition is in all the right places! isabelle's words are powerful, besides that, i only saw one spelling mistake in five, otherwise both poems are wonderful! |
| E.S. Lundgren 2006-03-25 ch 4, | abuseah-how sad! i like this idea, i just posted sort of my own kind of thing like this about five minutes ago before reading this, i'm thinking yours makes more sense though-your poetry flows pretty well and keeps consistant, i'm trying to think of some CC i could give you...(it's hard) perhaps try to put your poetry into "poetry format", not a big thing, i know, but it gives it more of a professional spin i think... the point is, it's good! |
| til-iburnout aka Amanda Hel... 2004-06-16 ch 4, | abusewow...that's so sad... |
| til-iburnout aka Amanda Hel... 2004-06-16 ch 3, | abuseI love how you use I am, in your poems. You do it so well, the repetition is perfect. |
| til-iburnout aka Amanda Hel... 2004-06-16 ch 2, | abusesimply put. I like |
| til-iburnout aka Amanda Hel... 2004-06-16 ch 1, | abuseThis is so good. I love how it goes from I am to You are, and the last line just clinches the feelings of it all. keep writing- til-iburnout Thanks for the review on Late Hour! I was a little shaky on posting that poem, unedited as it was. Then I realized that most of my stuff is unedited and needs work so o well.. Anyway..now I'm rambling... |
| JustBella 2004-06-08 ch 1, | abusevery interesting, I liked it |
| IcyDevil27 2004-06-06 ch 4, | abuseEach one of the poems was especially powerful in it's own way, but I enjoyed the second one the most. It's really amazing how you captured that event in that light. I never really thought of it that way. This is just the prelude, I note, therefore the story must be amazing! |
| Mirrorwind 2004-06-04 ch 1, | abuseOuch. That's really good. The last line makes it seem especially powerful. Very interesting people you have created, the relationship between the two, you can see how interesting it is just from this poem. |
| yspgirl 2004-05-28 ch 1, | abuseinteresting. now will this be a series of poems or will it turn into a story or... what? cause the start sounds cool. |