Wow, thats really good. Couldn't find anything to critisice, so good job.

Yes, yes, you are a horrible person.

Jermie thinks that it was cool.

I just want your cookies, man.

was he gay?

Beautifully written, descriptive, and deep. Great work, keep writing.
**Slave**

WOW this WAS VERY great!! i loved the descriptions, tho i didn't QUITE get teh story, it's okay, cuz you described it so well, my imagination can soar!!
great great GREAT job :)keep up :)
molo