| Reviews for A New Believer |
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aliveforever83 8/10/04 . chapter 5*laughs loudly* I lived the first 19 years and 11 months of my life in Arkansas and have now been living in Mississippi for a year and 9 days. I always say I don't have an accent, but as I was reading the 'dialect' bits, I didn't even hesitate. Guess that does mean I have an accent! Now, on to the actual review part of my review. Once more, you're a very good writer and the only thing I can say is that the chapters are a bit short. But, that could just be an illusion because they're single spaced. *shrugs* Anyway on to the next chapter. |
aliveforever83 8/10/04 . chapter 2Just got back from a long weekend on the coast and thought I'd check out some of your longer works. I'm really liking this one so far. You've got a really good writing stlye that makes for extremely easy reading. |
Endless Nightmares 6/17/04 . chapter 11Hello- Great ending, too a very short chaptered story. Good luck in your next horror story, and keep up the good work. |
Endless Nightmares 6/17/04 . chapter 10Hello- I am reviewing your work because I am a reviewest. Well, the story is almost over. You crafted a nice piece. |
Endless Nightmares 6/17/04 . chapter 9Hello- Longest chapter yet, nice one. See, it doesn't take much to write longer chapters. Anyway, great job. |
Endless Nightmares 6/17/04 . chapter 8Hello- I don't think I ever asked you this before, but why are your chapters so small? Is there some reason for that? I am just curious to why each story you make, its just small. I think if you just let yourself write, and give yourself time you'll be able to write more. I don't see it as an issue. |
Endless Nightmares 6/17/04 . chapter 7Hello- well, I think the story is losing some strength. How about a really malevolent Chester, who hurts people? That would make the story much cooler. |
Endless Nightmares 6/17/04 . chapter 6Hello- lol I think it was Chester, the ghost that doesn't exist. Nice job on the chapter. |
Endless Nightmares 6/17/04 . chapter 5Hello- I believe in ghosts heh. I wish I could just see one. |
Endless Nightmares 6/17/04 . chapter 4Hello- Nice job. |
Endless Nightmares 6/17/04 . chapter 3Hello- the only thing I suggest is some graphic descriptions of things. |
Endless Nightmares 6/17/04 . chapter 2Hello- Nice character development. We can see how much emotion each character has. Nice job. |
Endless Nightmares 6/17/04 . chapter 1Hello Slave- short, but has a good promise. |
avanfos 6/8/04 . chapter 11I thought the ending was great. Very spooky and cool. Didn't see the ghost wife thing coming though. Oh and I posted a response to your challenge for June, it is called Virtual Love. |
avanfos 6/8/04 . chapter 8Its is wife isn't it? Thinking I must read the next chapter. Squirrel hunting. Heh. Too great. |