Great piece, I liked the oposites you used in the beginning. But, correct me if I'm wrong, it seems like it's about insomnia, though I'm not that good with poetry metaphors. Anyway, I liked it's rhythm and the way it goes. Wonderful work.

Great poem. Good luck with poetry and life. Have a wonderful day.

~Twilight Starr~

I love this poem! You have quite a nice flow going, but you break it once or twice with the word choice. Although it seems to work quite nicely, as if you meant it to be like that. It's great.

hmm... this is an interesting poem. I like the way you wrote it.

okok I admit it, I only read this to tell you to update Unfinished Business!!I sorry.

I do like the way this poem is written tho...^.^

I really like this. I'm a big fan of poetry in general. But wouldn't a more fitting title be Pause in Mortality?

I love all you stories and poems and stuff! they're all so good. Keep it up!

Woh! This is one of the best poems I've ever read. Woh.

A wonderul poem. I love the title :).

I must say I'm definitely a HUGE poetry fan and writer, and I love your metaphor "Allow me to sit in a vacuum".

Very interesting, i liked it, but i really want to read more of FAlse FAcades and have no way of telling you!

Please write more!

~Tzotel

yeah cool poem.

you need to update chap5 in uh can't remember name and chap 27 in false facades now. it's time you haven't updated the exorcist one in like 2 years... literally...ok so yeah.

UPDATE THEM

Oh! I like the final line break. And you contrast the two personas so well...

You've put in subtle rhymes as well (whether you know it or not) and those worked nicely ^_^

Altogether a pleasure to read. It makes me wonder... if you meant more than one thing...

wow! loved it. The last two, no, three, lines remind me a bit of em. dickinson for some reason. I can't explain it. This was lovely!

whoa...that was cool. i could see ike a landing and a big grandfather clock and nighttime and someone tiptoeing... thx 4 checking out hunter! i am so grateful! do u have msn? if u do cud u give me ur addie and i can annoy u sumtime with my incessant chattering (mwahahahaha)) ahem...i mean we will have an interesting conversation. Thanx again for your review, bibi

Wow I really enjoyed this, you are such a good writer! The imagery was great, and the structure is great. It really is beautiful - theres truth but no logic. Amazing ~DS~