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| Twilight Starr 2007-11-16 ch 1,  | abuseGreat poem. Good luck with poetry and life. Have a wonderful day. ~Twilight Starr~ |
| greenGalilee 2006-08-19 ch 1, | abuseI love this poem! You have quite a nice flow going, but you break it once or twice with the word choice. Although it seems to work quite nicely, as if you meant it to be like that. It's great. |
| kt in the sky 2006-07-22 ch 1, | abusehmm... this is an interesting poem. I like the way you wrote it. okok I admit it, I only read this to tell you to update Unfinished Business!!I sorry. I do like the way this poem is written tho...^.^ |
| BeachButterfly 2006-07-19 ch 1, | abuseI really like this. I'm a big fan of poetry in general. But wouldn't a more fitting title be Pause in Mortality? |
| aquaclarinetist 2006-01-25 ch 1, | abuseI love all you stories and poems and stuff! they're all so good. Keep it up! |
| Lady Katreina 2006-01-09 ch 1, | abuseWoh! This is one of the best poems I've ever read. Woh. |
| writerforever 2005-12-19 ch 1, | abuseA wonderul poem. I love the title :). |
| Empty Darkness 2005-11-16 ch 1, | abuseI must say I'm definitely a HUGE poetry fan and writer, and I love your metaphor "Allow me to sit in a vacuum". |
| Tzotel431 2005-11-11 ch 1, | abuseVery interesting, i liked it, but i really want to read more of FAlse FAcades and have no way of telling you! Please write more! ~Tzotel |
| rosiedreamer 2005-08-07 ch 1, | abuseyeah cool poem. you need to update chap5 in uh can't remember name and chap 27 in false facades now. it's time you haven't updated the exorcist one in like 2 years... literally...ok so yeah. UPDATE THEM |
| BadSweets 2005-05-29 ch 1, | abuseOh! I like the final line break. And you contrast the two personas so well... You've put in subtle rhymes as well (whether you know it or not) and those worked nicely ^_^ Altogether a pleasure to read. It makes me wonder... if you meant more than one thing... |
| Written 2005-02-01 ch 1, | abusewow! loved it. The last two, no, three, lines remind me a bit of em. dickinson for some reason. I can't explain it. This was lovely! |
| Hotkitty 2005-01-30 ch 1, | abusewhoa...that was cool. i could see ike a landing and a big grandfather clock and nighttime and someone tiptoeing... thx 4 checking out hunter! i am so grateful! do u have msn? if u do cud u give me ur addie and i can annoy u sumtime with my incessant chattering (mwahahahaha)) ahem...i mean we will have an interesting conversation. Thanx again for your review, bibi |
| David Stephen 2004-12-29 ch 1, | abuseWow I really enjoyed this, you are such a good writer! The imagery was great, and the structure is great. It really is beautiful - theres truth but no logic. Amazing ~DS~ |
| feelingshortofstable 2004-10-19 ch 1, | abuseWow. That's awesome. And, you must know, that when the thought on a person's mind after they read your writing is, "wow," then you must be something. Keep it up! |