Well, I think it's awesome :) BRAVO, yet again! Keep up the great work!

Ah! I love your poems!! If you haven't noticed yet, hehe. This one is beautiful...the rhyming is subtle and the regrets and bitterness come across so well. I might almost suggest that it should be made longer to elaborate on the middle part (again, no poetic terminology here, rawr). Also, I think that the rhythm is broken just a little in the last line of the first section (stanza? I'm so poetry-ignorant...I'll go study up on this...hehe). Maybe you could delete "is" and leave it: My conscious eternally maimed. Or something to make it one syllable shorter. Good job!

Wow, this is very good, you have quite a talent for writing, keep it up!

hey that's really good!! rhyming poems are hard to write, hehe. all of mine always end up as songs. meh. really nice idea to write about. it's original. i like lots! and btw ... you told me if i ever posted my poetry, you'd read it. and a lot of people made similar comments, so the link's in my bio, if you'd care to look =)
~k8

I like this poem a LOT..it really speaks to me because I can relate

Very good for only your second rhyming poem! Interesting subject and you offer a nice angle on it. Good job well done!

For your second poem. Well done. There's a strong warning in this... and it's beautifully expressed. Keep trying to write outside of you 'comfort zone'... it's interesting what you bring out.

Ah... very beautiful. Well written.
Your soul seems to speak in this piece. Moving, to say the least.

Nicely written. Good job.

Absolutely brilliant! I'm used to your wonderful Haiku work, but to read this now is... leaving me in awe! Every stanza left my jaw on the floor. I love the sense of this as well, because I feel it relates to me a lot and to a lot of my stuff (I havven't posted yet). The poem was marvelous, but by far the last stanza was a work of art! This is beautiful my friend, excellent work!

IT RHYMES! Its BEAUTIFUL! Very, very, very well done! I love the wisdom of this piece. Its marvelous!
~ CoolBeans18s