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Reviews For: We Will Not Be the Sun

elfmaid
2005-08-08
ch 1,
Great work here. I love villanelles, and I love the idea behind this one. Keep it up. =)
ladylore
2004-07-05
ch 1,
Brilliant! I loved it.
Usuckass13
2004-06-22
ch 1,
That's kind of confusing.
Star of the Morning
2004-06-06
ch 1,
you know, I got up this morning. I meant to ask you to pass the butter, but instead I said, "You **! You've ruined my life!" Seriously though. Form poetry is hardcore, andwow. Yours is some seriously impressive **, darling. he. Keep on rockin in the free world.
Willow Elandria
2004-05-31
ch 1,
Excellent villanelle! Heh, makes mine look horrible... thanks a lot. *sniff*
Wonderful imagery... and I definitely think there's meaning in it.
One tiny little thing: you repeat "end" in both your A1 and A2 lines... this sounds fine at first, but in the last stanza seems a little too repetitive. Otherwise, perfect.
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