That was very cute! I liked it!

First of all, i absolutely LOVE the image at the start, the golden sun part, because it's just really warm and you can imagine it in your head. Secondly, i like the describing of this mysterious relationship. It kind of reminds me of "Pursuit" by Sylvia Plath. The structure is very good, also. Good work! ^__^

Wow, Great Job ^_^ Keep it up

wow

There's some really beautiful wording and metaphor in here--"as the darkness creeps out from behind the stars"..gorgeous!--and I really like some of the lining. However, you're doing that thing again where you make a line really short for no apparent reason; there are a couple of places where it would work better if you combined two lines.I love that they say "who are you?"; that's inspired. I also love ther comparison to a dog wagging its tail, and "I scared me". One thing: I think the last line of the third verse would work better if it were "that no one knows but you." Just thought I'd throw that out there. Lovies, pointythings

I like this; it has a dream-like quality, yet it seems so real. =) I like the way it can have so many meanings.

Kudos!

technically okay

that was very intense i know how it feels.

This is a good poem

This is a truely powerful poem.

me again..
loved it.
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** you writing about?

I know exactly how you feel, believe me. They way things are now with a certain person - it's like it never even happened, you know? All the walks on the beach, and the stupid trips to theme parks, and the stupid movies I watched with her, and the dumb music I tolerated for her. It was all in vain. I might as well not even exist now, as far as she is concerned. *sigh*
I love the way you wrote this, so painful, so beautiful... I've said it a thousand times before, but you convey things that I just cannot. I just wish I could do things so... beautifully, so effortlessly...
P.S. I hope you feel okay. I know that relationships and love and ** can be the most painful things in the ** world, but I guess it gets better... it takes a LONG time, but it happens. You just have to hang in there, dude.
Feel better.
Be safe.
- John.

I've been there... and it's not nice at all. I can totally relate to that...
Any advance on maybe helping me out with my trilogy? Let me know xx
Much love Willow Delace xx
p.s ANYONE READING THIS REVIEW! READ EVERYTHING BY THIS AUTHOR! SHE RULES THE WORLD!! Hehe, hope it gets you more reviews xx

It has a nice topic, and I liked some of the exoressions you used, like wagging my tail. I loved it. Please R/R.