Hey, Caprice. ^^ Thanks for reviewing Graveyard Girl the other day. I'd actually left fictionpress for good because I stopped writing, then I got your review and came back. Thanks. ^^

Anyway, to the story.

I liked it. =D Beautiful and vivid vocab. and I liked the way you described the murder. It was terrific.

However, I spotted this:

"...a black nothing"

Heh, I think it should be 'a black nothingNESS'. ^^

And please continue this. Because it was too abrupt an ending (if you're not continuing) and I would really want to read it if you continue! You've gotten me hooked. =)

So... I don't have much left to say, but thanks again for bringing me back to this place. =)

~Whynter

Another satisfactory piece of work. Tell me, how do you do it?
If you are longing for ideas on things to write, perhaps you could bring this girl back into the picture somehow. A short story involving her experiences would be an interesting read.
Thank you for your time.

I can't help but think that this story could use another chapter.

Very interesting. I like the "I told you I would kill you if you called your guards. I didn't say you'd live if you didn't" line.

It was so cool girl I love it it was great Sorlo was so creepy yet cool

okay, i kinda don't get this one. is the first thing the thing that happened three years ago? anyway, really good.