wow...I didn't get a thing! whoa...who am I kidding...I'm Patty!
Brain: Don't state the obvious bimbo.
Me: U just stated the obvious! I am a Bimbo!
Brain: ugh...
Me: Um...anyways, I think it's good but I might have to read this again...cuz it takes long to register u know? lol bye Luna! :D

I see from your bio that you mostly submit (write?) poetry, which doesn't surprise me, as this tale has a thoughtful, flowing, poetic feel to it. You also have a good grasp of how to write dialogue, but I wish you could "tighten up" the dialogue here a bit more: some of it gets *too* repetitive. This next may be just my personal taste, but I'd also love to see you develop much more in the way of "descriptive narrative:" you give us tantalizing tid-bits, but no more than tid-bits ("...I saw a silver shine at the bottom...or the top." -- neatly done!) ("...up at the shining stars where answers have once been found." --not grammatically correct, but a wonderful image just the same).
So, my advice: tighten up and pare down the philosophical journey, and fill the story out more with description. And please don't tell me what a school-teacher I sound like! :-D