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| Franken 2004-06-07 ch 1,   | That was really good, although the last line didn't sound quite complete. It sounded like you wanted to say, "Depends on what you see" but that would be too many syllables. I think if I were you I would have found a different way to put it. Anyways though, I really loved the first and second lines (Second one was awesome). Great job here, truly excellent! --Franken-- |