very interesting style of writing.i like!

A lot of attention to detail...very real
I don't know why but the hair thing reminded me of the Outsiders..

Wow. Damn long chapter Keira, but damn good too. To just see how life changed for them... It's sad,but it's also something to give you hope. I like those.
I thought the characters were really well brought out. Kyle being mysterious, yet young and innocent is really interesting. And Ash knowing too much for his own good and people don't think he's smart is perfect of the out look you give him. Reminds me a bit of Pepsi. It's a great set up for a couple of brothers. It also leaves questions. You post another chapter and people will come. It's got something to bring people back and that marks a great writer. I'm proud of ya buddy and I know Allison thinks the same. Keep it up.
See ya in the funny papers. Sonah
P.s. Pepsi is bugging the hell out of me! Muses!

I cried.I felt so sorry for Kyle and Ash.It sounds so horrible.They had such a good life when they were children.Too bad their dad died.

this is the first original story that I ever read becuse Kira wrote it and she is the most incredible talented writer I ever seen..YOU MUST READ ALL HER WORk.
am tilling you she is amazing and this story proves it,

Ha! I was the first to read it even before it was posted. I feel special now. You already know what i think of it. I told you in my e-mail. So powerful...and deep. There mom sounds like a meanie version of The Curtis' lol im werid i know. Well keep it up!

I like this.Write more soon and quick.I only found your pen name from forbidden Shadows vanity poem.Write more soon.

Yay! You took the risk, good on ya! lol. This is really good! i love it. The Young Adult section badly needed some good stories. You havn't mentioned this persons name or did i just miss it? i hope not. Anywayz enough of my rambling keep it up and Update soon!

Well it was differnet from the other stuff you write but I recognized some classic Keira words. I liked it but I still don't know the main character's name. Oh well I will have to read and find out. So don't torture me long! UPDATE THIS FIC!
See ya in the funny papers! Sonah

This is a great start. You can really sense the setting. I'd definitely reccomend that you continue this! You're a great writer! Keep writin'!

That was really great! I loved how you stared it, and the writing style is just awesome. I love it. But it sounds really sad, i just know it will be. BSo, get a move on and update soon please! I want to read more, and im sure others will too!