Nice use of rhyming. And the image is unique.

One thing though:"iin"in

Hawke

I like this, it's short but leaves my mind filled with thoughts, Great Job!

hm, interesting.
punctuation, pls? Just whenever you'd stop for a breath.
Also- typo, "The scars iin my mind"

Gah! That's quite some imagery. I like the title especially, hmm what's with me always liking the word acid X_x but yeah this is quite vivid, and I would say morbid but it's not really that way to me, short but sweet and I like it.
Jenna xx

Wow. Extremely effective in its short, yet so expressive diction. Also the tight structure with the rhyme scheme and parallelism body/ soul works really well. The images are grand, so vivid and so true in what they express. I can relate to the poem ...

Hidy hi! The angst it just wants to sweep you away and whoah does it ever, so short yet so brilliant! Amazing _

oohh, very short but very true and beautiful, much loves to this

that was beautiful! wow! am i ever impressed! that was so well thought out and written! :D