Reviews for Jacob Lawerance - FictionPress.com

emmy09 2004-06-11 ch 1,	ok, i have read a lot of your work, and i really think you need help on grammar. Your writing doesnt flow either. You shouldnt use the word 'I' in a paper like this, either. Work on your grammar and keep writing ~Mia~
Alcaeus of Cronus 2004-06-08 ch 1,	Your teachers probably tell you this all the time, but it can't hurt to hear it again. Never use the word "I" in a term paper. It's passive, and passive is bad. Also, watch for run-on sentences and comma placement. Grammar is pretty decent. Overall, a very decent report.
Kylie 2004-06-08 ch 1,	Hey, you e-mailed me to check out some of you stuff, so I did. I chose this one because it was the only one of many to have 0 reviews. In my oppinion it's alright as a school report type thing. But, it also has the potential to be a great story. If you describe the scene at the begining, maybe you could, go to when the painting was being painted or something. We're the people models, or was Lawrence just painting for the hell of it. Just a thought. P.S. Did you read anything of mine, or just you just randomly pick someones e-mail?