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| Shannon 2004-06-18 ch 1,  | Wow! I could tell this one was pretty heartfelt. My suggestion would be to avoid using phrases such as 'gone...without a trace' that are used so often they can sound cliche'd (I just spelled that wrong probably). The last two lines I really liked - good job! |