Wow. And I do mean Wow with a capital W. This story is amazing. How do you do it? I love the descriptions. I really felt McKenzie's feelings and that is something that not many stories can do. An all around great short story. Very scary, but beautiful at the same time.

...that was interesting, but i so didn't get that... sorri, mayb it was way over my head. mayb, it's cuz i'm stupid... oh, well, it was interesting, i'm serious 'bout that, not joking or anything, u r a very good riter... no u'r not 'shite'

You're quite the talent. Keep up the good work. Hasta luego.
chibichocobo

NOW I understood what you meant in your reveiw about my death scene. This is a perfect example of what you were explaining to me--it has deph, mystery, and the sudden change in McKenzie's attitude certianly sparked my interest.
You have no reason to call your writing "shite". You have talent, my friend.

I enjoyed it. Very detailed.
Prudance
(Im Irish too)

twisted, slightly. love that!! haha seriously i did. anyways, i saw one of your reviews on some newer fic and it really caught my eye. commendation has to go to you for being so detailed in your reading and demanding in the writing style. it's seriously lacking on this site. so i was just wondering if you could withstand making that kind of observation about another's writing. and i have nothing bad to say about this. it's different, and i like that. descriptive, engaging ... you did yourself proud. =) really nice job through and through. would you do me a favour and take a look at one of my fics? i could do with a critic =P
~k8

I don't have AIM, but I wanted to say I shall delete those reviews when I can, I suspected something of the sort had happened as I rather like this piece of work, so I didn't think you'd be a mindless type of person! A friend of mine submitted a review to you as well, so if you could get rid of that we would be equal.
Sorry about all the difficulties, all is forgiven :-D

I really love how descriptive you are.

Cool, I really liked it. Keep writing.

Wow! This was very well done! good dscription of scene and some nice surprises! A couple typos, but nothing too bad. Good job!
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And, as to your coment on my intro .. I don't know what Busted sounds like *hehe*, um, so if you don't like them HELL NO this fictitious hardcaore punkband does NOT sound like Busted! haha

Wow, I am in awe. That's good -- you could write a novel. Write more, please! I love gangster/police stuff! I also noted that you have a really good flow to your writing -- it really pulls you in. My only complaint is that there is so little of it!

Well, in my book, a review earns a review, so here we go...
First of all, I liked the premise of the story. I have no clue why you would hate this piece, it is brilliant. Your "pasty Irish arse", as you so eloquently put it, can write.
Next, I do have some minor spelling things, because, while being American, I do have ancestry in Italy and Poland. Capeesh is spelled capisce, and Shmuck is schmuck. Not to different, but still things that caught the eye of Cougar's Spellcheck.
Finally, I enjoyed the way the whole thing seemed to flow. You didn't need to put prequel- or sequel-type stuff in, because this stands alone as a story. Very good.
~CDx3~

Reminds me of a story I wrote, really great, you've got something there.

Very nice. It's hard to jam in any kind of twist or turn that's going to have any effect on the audience in so few words, but you managed nicely. I particularly liked the allusion to the Medusa and calling a cig a "cancer stick." Brilliant touch. +12 respect points =D. There were some minor format errors (damn those quotes!) but I hate them as much as the next man, so no big deal at all. Well done..."lad".

wow...can u r&r my stories?