 Evangeline 2004-10-02 . chapter 1First, I'd like to thank you for reviewing my poem, "Asylum".
I really enjoy the simplicity of this piece. It has very striking patterns and manages to be sentimental without being unbearably sappy/weepy. The emotion came naturally and didn't seem at all forced.
The only criticism I have is that the last line, "and let me be me", seemed a little sparse. I don't really know of any other way to end it, but I thought you might find it useful to know that the ending just seemed a tad anticlimatic.
Again, thank you for the review. |