i liek it.. especially all the ateds
Today I waited for my soul mate; I thought we'd made it... either we'd make it or we made it
Nice job.. especially the ending

Amazing... I know the feeling too. It's so well-described, just... wow

That is sad. Nothing more I can say about it.

this is incredible...i favor the rhyming..and the flow is good.now ima check out some more of your stuff. keep em comming

The last line is like a knife through the heart. The pain it evokes shrieks of tortures unimagineable. Your hurt must be very deep, to write with such poignancy. I hope things turn out well for you.

Okies, I wouldn't try and rhyme something like this, because it looses all its meaning, and don't use so many long words, because it doesn't make you look clever just amateurish. A poem like this doesn't achieve what your trying to get across. I think it would be better without the forced rhyming