Again, I liked the ending the best. Very very powerful

Keep it up!

~Lidless Eye

Excellent work. Perfect rhythm and near perfect diction. This poem could work so many ways it seems. I loved it.

Amazing! I love the symbolisim in this piece, and the imagery is so moving! The repitition at the end of each stanza really helps tie the poem together. Wonderfully done!
~ CoolBeans18s

Wow, that was interesting. A lot of great imagery, and a lot of symbolism I think.. Great job, write on!

This is cool. You should try writing Kyrielles, they have a repeated end-line like that, too.