Muahahaha.. i lied about writing a review for every chapter XD... i didn't realized that all of 'em were short so i read until chapter 5 now. So so gud!! hehe... a girl and a boy... laying on a bed... k i s s i n g~~ hehe.. lol... ^^... so, is that how u picture on kissing a boy on the bed?? lol... jk jk ... (azri might like it though ^^) HAHAHA.. lol... i better stop sayin all these stuff cuz i might get my ** wipped... hehe

msn msn... haven't seen u in a while now :( ... ur too busy? cuz i'm also and i think i would be free like in weekends now... but i don't know. well, i'll chat to u when we see each other again ok? may the best win..u know wat i mean

-peace out *

okie..since u like to have alot of review, i'll do a review for every chapter for u ^^... i like the first chapter cuz u went straight at the point and made it interesting for me to read on. ok... i'll read the next chapter cuz i really wanna know wat is going to happen.. peace out

good ,but make sure you read over your stuff. I am a failer at doing that but o well . for instance (stood =stand)^_^

ok, i got a little confused along the way, but it sort of cleared up a little. I'm actually not used to reading this kind of story, but i could get used to it. :) talking about homework, it sure does get more when you get older. My homework are piling up. and, i have 3 exams for 8 different subjects this year. and considering there are many different papers, it means that i have 51 different papers to do in 365 days, and that is excluding all that class tests. BLEH!
oh yeah, thanks for reviewing my story anyway. Which part of Asia are you from, by the way?

Oh! I like the first chapter already. and the line" woe is me." do you know that i always say that? ALL THE TIME. woe is me. woe is me. woe is me. ok, i'm nuts.

fearell chan...i want next chaputer...
ish good story...y u not continue eh? i want next chapter eh? what's he gonna do eh? im no canadian eh

hahaha...i wuz reading my old review...and i thot the savior wuz her dad...lol...im stupid...'no ur not' (voice inside of my head says...)...newayz...i realized i hvent reviewed for dis chapter yet...so yea...please review la! im dying of boredom at home...and now i hv to write the next chapter of my ever-so-boring story...so yea...please update la!
-hurricane

hey...dude...is he really her dad..
make sum sequels to these stories
they're really interesting..
mine are boring
cuz im a beginner
but mine are gonna be awesome...
anywayz..good job on the writing...
hehe..

Whee, this is interesting. Does Hayley die (like it implies in the summary)? Did you say their ages, because if you did, I must have missed it or something ~.~; How old are they?
... party in the classroom? LOL!
Well anyways, I like this story, and will continue to read it =^^=; It's got an interesting plot, and I want to know what happens to Hayley. He sounds cute. And drunk. Aha XDD I'd write more, but my time is running out ;0;

Fiera...sounds like a fake innocent person. she's like Onodera Karen. that means ur Miyafujii Miina...
wtr, an ok ch. I don't prefer this chap to the second story. I want to hear that one.

Hi, whats up. My name is Chuck...wait that was a lie! My name is Devon. but anyway, that is beside the point. This is like, the coolest story ever. EVER. lol. Yup good job. Welcome to my Author Alert list, my Favorite Authors list, and my Favorite stories list! GO YOU! You get the seat of honor!

1st of all, ho's Fierra? :S
gr! what u mean PARTY STARTED?!?! EH? wut dey do? hmm?!? don lemme think wrong kimmi! (darn...thinkin it...) NEXT CHAPER PLEASE! common...u hav tym...weekends and after school and holday this tuesday!! SEE? plenty of time ^^

meh, it's alright. It could have used a hell of a lot more description, like the rest of the chapters, but it's still alright. Just...move the plot along a bit more please.

Sprites? Faeries? Somehow changing this whole thing that's happening? Strange...but I was still reading. And I will read more, when you post it, if you'd be so kind as to alert me when you do.
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More POV changes. If you read back over this, you'll realize that it is 1st person POV from Hayley for the first few lines, but then goes back to 3rd person. Just read it and see.
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And it's Porsche, by the way. Not Porche.
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And that is so not an aweful lot of swearin'

Is this story going to do a lot of changing POV's? Because in the previous chapters, you were speaking 3rd person, but in this one it's 1st from Hayley. But that's why it's called Hayley's part, right? Interesting concept, but I"d like some more plot please. And descriptions would be nice too.