Good, sad story.

It has potential.

Good luck with writing and this story.

Have a wonderful day. :)

~Twilight Starr~

Incredible! *calms erratic heart* I love the gothic element in here: the mysterious connection between the two that surpassed the boundaries of physics, nature, and death so Dave and Sarah could say goodbye. LOVE IT! I also have a connection with this, but I won't go into that either. I love how I can connect to your stories. But, anyway, the mechanics were good. The story was so engaging, if there was any grammatical errors, I didn't notice - which, by the way, is quite a feat. And, you kept it simple. Simplicity is often the best tool a writer can utilize.

*cries* that was so sad, so beautiful, it was too damn good.

This is really good. I never would have known cuz I usually don't read things without summeries but the title caught me. You really should give summeries so more people will read these. They're really good. Some of the best I've read. I liked this one especially. Your use of quotes was really good. It made it that much more enjoyable.
You keep writing, i'll keep reviewing.
Jake.

oh man. that was great. it was incredibly realistic (up to the end but i love that) and i kept feeling like i knew these people. ive actually been in a similar situiation and i know exactly what Sarah was going through. wonderful writing, i think i will add you to my fave's list.