FictionPress.com - let the words flow
| FictionPress.com - let the words flow |
|
| Home Just In Communities Forums Beta Readers Dictionary Search | Login Register Extras |
| IcyFlames 2004-06-14 ch 1,  | U told me to review u so here i am. Umm...i think that it needs to flow a little bit better (ur prolly sick of hearing that from other ppl) but othere than that i think its pretty good...i think its more poem than song to tell u the truth, but its very good. i like the writing style a lot. Keep on writing! IcyFlames^_- |
| Confluence 2004-06-12 ch 1,  | Cool random thoughts dude, rock on! I've got thirteen daze of school left. Really! |
| emmy09 2004-06-11 ch 1, | you sent me an e-mail to review your work, so here i am. You seem to try too hard to rhyme, and it makes the whole thing seem forced. Let the poetry take you away, dont try to force anything. Its also a kind of confusing poem. But you have the basic idea. So keep writing ~mia~ |
| Wings of Fire Band 2004-06-09 ch 1, | Decent... but I'm not really sure how it's a song, really. It seems more like a poem. It's good, but I dunno. I don't see how it would be put to music. |
| punkesita 2004-06-09 ch 1, | ok... keep writing... improve yourself... |
| Neko Chan Storm 2004-06-09 ch 1, | this scared me abit i had no idea what was going on |
| Teekle 2004-06-08 ch 1, | m... *scans through other reviews* true, poetry is emotion, poetical diverse and so on, but it can also be just jotted down words. Future tip: Whenever something strikes you as interesting, jot it down and see if something more creative comes to mind later! |
| Alcaeus of Cronus 2004-06-08 ch 1, | Your material is somewhat confusing. It is captivating and well written, but I can't figure out if you're trying to be humerous or if you're recaping inside jokes and story of your own life. Nevertheless, nicely written. Just think a little harder about your message. |
| cresnstar 2004-06-08 ch 1, | hello^^ i think this is good but when u write a song arent u supposes to make things vague? ehehe i dunno what im talking about...>.>;; i making a fool of my self^^:: well keep writng^^ |
| Moonlite Star 2004-06-08 ch 1, | Interesting. It doesn't seem to flow too well though, with the different events. Keep writing! |
| Nat Rich 2004-06-07 ch 1, | You have an immature mind and that is why this poem is lacking common sense. Please, stop talking about your hates and likes and ryming! lol I am sorry for all the rudeness, truely I am, but you need to remember that poetry is feeling, emotion, poetical diverse, not some words jotted down and some scrappy ryming. ...You told me to review, please accpet the critisism, it's constructive. - Nat Rich |