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| stealingzephyrs 2006-09-25 ch 1, | abuseOh, wow! That was soo good! It has, like magic in it. And I'm not high or anything. It reads like a fairy tale. Very Nice. |
| OnceADreamer 2006-09-04 ch 1, | abuseAw, cute. |
| Osunale 2006-08-03 ch 1, | abuseLovely rhythm here. A sweetly emotional piece. The conclusion stanza is very pretty and provides a perfect closing. I like. One line that bothers me: "a tiny hand parts open the door." Right there the movement halts. 'parts open' might not be the best phrasing. |
| Shinji Boi69 2004-06-08 ch 1, | abuseThis is cool. I like it when people write things when they are a little "out of it" j/k. This is really good. I liked how it rhymed. I thought that the rhyming wouldn't work out but it did. Keep it up. Great job. Jake |
| Neko Kuroban 2004-06-07 ch 1, | abuseAmazingly written; it is perfect, almost... well, I feel like a fool to describe it in this way, but have you ever heard a song, so perfect you have to blink away tears, as if to keep your self from shattering with its majesty? That is how this made me feel. |