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| Embarr 2008-07-15 ch 40, anon. | abuseI really like this story, but there were a few incongruencies that bugged me. I know you said you were going to re write it so I am sure you will catch all these anyway, but the major ones for me were Ms and Mrs Cunningham when you previously stated that the grandmother was the mother's mother and in the very last chapter, you wrote "...recently recovered from a horrific bus crash that took the life of his half-brother...", when he didn't die at all - wasn't he the one that helped pull people out of the bus? Or this could all be mistaken since I just finished reading it and could be missing something... Sorry for the confusing fragmented sentence! Off to read your other works :) |
| xclarissamariex 2008-07-15 ch 14,  | abuseI love this story.=] |
| Muffins 2008-07-14 ch 40, anon. | abuseI loved the whole story you did great. It was amazing. I think that you should make a sequel. Cause that would be amazing. |
| muffins 2008-07-14 ch 37, anon. | abusewill's announcement was so adorable great job. |
| Apple Cherry Muffins 2008-07-13 ch 34, | abuseWhat the hell he can't be parilized I mean, that means that he can't dance and not dancing is bad. like really bad. |
| Apple Cherry Muffins 2008-07-13 ch 32, | abuselike i said before will better live |
| lyndea kelleher 2008-07-13 ch 38, | abusewow, i liked the story, it was really cute. But i honestly did not like the character of jessica. She was always putting herself down and really she just acted so dumb to me sometimes. But i was falling in love with Will, he just seems perfect. Haha, good story ! |
| Apple Cherry Muffins 2008-07-13 ch 31, | abuseWHAT just happened. That is not alowd. I swear if you kill jess or will i will have to kill you. |
| Apple Cherry Muffins 2008-07-13 ch 30, | abuseI can't wait to see Will squirm about finding out about how Jess feels about him. |
| Apple Cherry Muffins 2008-07-13 ch 29, | abuseThat awful evil bastard of a scum of a human being that is Andrew I can't belive that he would do something so horrible. Gr |
| Apple Cherry Muffins 2008-07-13 ch 23, | abuseSo i don't feel sorry for preverted bastard Mr Cunningham anymore. But poor Jess. God I would hate getting almost raped. |
| Apple Cherry Muffins 2008-07-13 ch 21, | abuseYeah Emo's do exist, and I like how you didn't make them out to be horrible people cause I'm friends with a few of them at my school. |
| Apple Cherry Muffins 2008-07-13 ch 20, | abuseIDK I feel sort of sorry for My Cunningham, I mean, he doesn't have his family anymore, cheating bastard or not. I mean i think that he proably truly cares for his son. |
| muffins 2008-07-13 ch 18, anon. | abuseI loved this chapter great job. |
| muffins 2008-07-13 ch 16, anon. | abuseYay they forgived each other again, I'm glad that Will doesn't like Samantha. |