Smirk. I love this. I feel so wonderfully powerful now... Anyhoo, yes, normally I would here go into a long break down of what I liked and didn't of the piece, but this I just enjoyed, and will leave it at that. It's brilliant.

wow this is really good matt...its a different feel for what u usually write hahaha...oh this is jackie but im changing my username "the unknown" to another name that im not sure what it is yet but ill let u know. aight good poem!

This one is weird. It makes a world of sense, but at the same time it makes absolutely none, because everything sort of falls down hill while you're reading it. Towards the end I started wondering what inspired it, and for some reason got the mental image of one of those guys in the top box at the baseball games. I loved the formatting, too; it really helped make the poem.
Gabby