wow. that's all i've gotta say.
that was very powerful

Nice. I really liked the story. It actually took me, like, five tries to figure out what Ariadne's name was. Does her name mean something? Whatever. This was a really good story, and I'm going to read the sequel, if there is one. If there isn't, I'm going to hound you until you write one.

Bye, now.

my 2.5 kids?

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ok...im so confused. if sirel and jamnis are dating, why did jamnis kiss dana, and why would sirel say jamnis was jealous and why did dana kiss jamnis on the cheek and why does jamnis seem closer to dana than to sirel?

Very intense and unexpected:) Got my attention which is a plus:D I'm trying to analyze your writing style and how to write a story while enjoying the chapter. Kinda hard when you get distracted by whats going on:P Will read on (^_^)

I just read this story, and thought it was really good. I loved it.

Hello,

I just wanted to tell you that I loved your story. It had an original plot and kept me up until I finished it. It really was a great story. I was unable to stop reading once I started, and I ended up reading it all in one sitting. Which I think is quite an accomplishment. Keep up the good work. I can't wait to finish the next one.

Very good first chapter, especially for starting this at fifteen.

Love this story! I read the first two stories and they are GREAT!! Will start with the 3rd one now :D XOX Letty

Great story! The characters are amazing! XOX Letty

omfg it's over. well this book is. :)

are... you.. serious? really she just excused herself, cried in the bathroom and came back out. and was completely fine with it. umm ok?

I absolutely ADORE this entire series of stories. Your writing style is wonderful and the characters are so loveable! Continue writing!

Intresting chapter to start off with . The chapter really draws the reader in and makes them question what the heck is going on ( which is typically a good thing when done right) and why this guys guts are practically exploding out of him ( I know over-dramatizing it there >< .) It really leaves the reader wanting to know more (well it does for me .) The characters personality shines even in just this small chapter .Great job on that .
Over all this isn't bad first chapter .
M.R.Sanner
P.s.
I absolutely adore all the books you have listed on your profile . Especially No Humans involved which was fabulous as are all the Kim Harrisons and Patricia Briggs . Yay for urban Fantasy !

Wow.AH-MAZING.
I love it so much. I continue to read it when I get time.
I noticed a typo though.
I glanced at a newspaper rack. Cross-species marriages rise in number, the headline on the local culture page read. I took a swig of my orange juice and decided to job for a while. To get this surge of energy out of my system.
I'm pretty sure job should be JOG. But other than that GREAT AMAZING SUPER DUPER JOB!