Ow... wow. good use of rhyme, and interesting imagery. I like you're style, and the rhythm. the indents create a good rhythm which makes this a great read! love it!
What a lovely piece of darkness...you made me want to weep for the person who was lost under the deception of another. I think people who have felt betrayed by someone they trust, someone who has took a piece of them, or even created something they dont like in themselves, can relate. Bravo to you on this.
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