Ow... wow. good use of rhyme, and interesting imagery. I like you're style, and the rhythm. the indents create a good rhythm which makes this a great read! love it!

What a lovely piece of darkness...you made me want to weep for the person who was lost under the deception of another. I think people who have felt betrayed by someone they trust, someone who has took a piece of them, or even created something they dont like in themselves, can relate. Bravo to you on this.

Lovely work, great job!

wow.. very powerful and well done

Depressing but so beautilful. I love this poem.