...Wow, that's so cool! I have absolutely no clue what you're talking about. I thought of the Matrix when I read this, ha ha ha. Anyway, thank you so much for reminding me that I put my haiku in the wrong section. Doumo arigatou gozaimasu!

Hello- Very good haiku here. Its a nice one.

Hrmm... title confused me from your poem... and not sure if I knew quite what you were talkin about... title is throwin me off.. But yeah, very nice imagery in this haiku. The wording was perfect; extensive vocabulary such as lethargy, and cleaving, and even more impressive was how you used these words. I just loved the "phrase" structure, and they are just so captivating.
Great job and keep on writin'!
-Debbirooni

I thought that the first line was the very best. Clouds of confusion, it reminded me of. Through it isn't the same. Oh well.

It's okay, but in my opinion, it doesn't stick to the title.

yes yes nice nice again

This one is a bit calm for my tastes, but none the less still makes a nice picture. :)

Beautiful haiku! TALENT-O-METER: 9 WOW OFF DA CHARTS! ) Really though... Beautiful! It's nice to see a well-written tanka... One that really speaks to me...
Sterces