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| Cloud Burst 2004-12-20 ch 1,   | simple yet effective very well written! |
| lifescrewsusall 2004-08-18 ch 1, | Very well organized and clear. Great, descriptive words too. Good job! |
| SweetWithUncertainty 2004-08-03 ch 1, | Nice poem, I don't know what a tanka is, but your poem was great. Keep writing SwimmerGirl |
| Queen of dawn 2004-08-01 ch 1, | if i said this haiku needs critism i would be lying. very nicely written ;) aussi je parle francais. |
| Seeing Starz 2004-07-26 ch 1, | Tanka, I don't know much about tanka. I do believe that in a tanka the first 3 lines are an image an the last 2 are an event, or it was a situtation and then an emotional response. Well I like the fact that you did not follow the 5/7/5/7/7 but you still ended up with 31 syllables. YOu had some great wording in this and a all around good piece. I especially like the second line. |
| pecado 2004-07-09 ch 1, | that's really nice... i like the words you use! --your pecado-- |
| til-iburnout aka Amanda Hel... 2004-06-27 ch 1, | I think it's good, I like the words you use and in the order you use them. keep writing- til-iburnout P.S. Thank you for the review on my poem Summer. Though you probably forgotten it, it's been awhile since you reviewed it. |
| Merit Somnia 2004-06-17 ch 1, | Like the second and last lines. The use of words was well sone and I liked the feeling of this Tanka. |
| FAKE?romances 2004-06-12 ch 1, | love your wording =). oh, and your profile totally freaked me out. because i just found out i have perfect pitch, too, thanks to my friend justin, who feels the need to make sure i still HAVE perfect pitch every time he sees me ^_^. ehh. i love your writing too haha. you're going on my author alert list. |
| Minchi 2004-06-12 ch 1, | Hm...I like it! I think you did a good job on this one. ~Minchi |
| Sarika 2004-06-11 ch 1, | I decided to come back and read some of your mroe recent stuff. Lovely choice of words here. Have a nice day :o) - Sarika |
| diSasteRangL 2004-06-11 ch 1, | hey... nice poem. i especially like the title you gave it. =) but i was thinking... if i'm not mistaken, isn't the second line supposed to have seven syllables? |diSasteRAngL| |
| Dracula, Lord of the Vampir... 2004-06-11 ch 1, | Good tanka. Stays true to the title. P.S Can you review my poems called "With Love Comes Guilt", "Becoming A Vampire", and "The Opera Singer". |
| Cry Tears of Darkness 2004-06-11 ch 1, | i like these small and little poems. so cute |
| MR.SEAN 2004-06-11 ch 1, | I like the words you used, and what you are talking about. Oh, and about your review of the first haiku or the first haiku in a while. I tell people here that to, I was just a bit rusty. I never put anything on fictionpress that I'm not happy with. So thats all, I am getting back into haiku mode. So thats all~ bye bye! :) |