Wonderful!
I like the flow. :)

the last image was like mind blowingly powerful, just that image of a homeless guy in the snowy frost.i love 'and men like me werent meant to be'.ur writing is truly wonderful!well done!!keep up this wonderful poetry...love and admiration Gretchen45 xplease review my story 'Truly madly deeply' as itd mean alot to me! tanx x

The only complaint I have about this one is that it...just ends. It doesn't feel like it should end there. I'm with Raven's Cross on this one...it's a smidge hard to follow. But your language is so beautiful that I almost don't care.

Now that was perfect! I really liked the line, "and men like me weren't meant to be." it really stood out. great job.

i can just sit here and read everything u wrote, but i don't have the time...hopefully i won't forget to come by next time! once again, a masterpiece.
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Wonderful poem although i did have a hard time following it but i can also tell that this was an intense flow of emotion. Nice way of getting it on paper for other's eyes to read. :)*

Its quite sad actually. In a nice, expected way. Theres an odd formatting error though, that makes it difficult to read.

I like the way it flows, its really nice the way it just keeps on and yet ends at the right time. I like it. Its nice.

Short, understated. I don't quite know how this is a meditation of a perfect man. By saying your perfect you enter the realm of the Paradox making you imperfect in your perfection.