The last stanza is beautifully written.

An interesting poem, but I think that in the last stanza the verbs succumb and embrace should be in the imperfect tense.

thanks for my review on "headaches." i love this poem. you present a great metaphor and supply it with wonderfully vivid imagery.

In ways it's confusing, but then again... it has a strong sense of mythicism, theology and theory, along with a 'takes my breath away' sort of thing. I like the idea. Not used, not similiar, just different. Me likes.

scary . me no likes snakes!
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nice poem

Keep writing!

Ladies and Gentleman welcome in this brand new and fresh Masterpiece! This poem is very vivid and is one of my fav.

Whoa, very nicely done! I especially liked the second stanza, great description and imagery, you really do have a way with words, I wish I could write as well as you! Keep it up!

O! I like this on lots! its going on my fav. list to spread your talent!we! there it goes!

Wow, this is really good. I love the dark aspect, and the whole take me to another place, like a dream. Good job.

You have such a way with words, it's truly beautiful, mysterious, it leaves much to the imagination in a good way.

I love it! It's really really cool! Oh, and thanks for the reviews they made me smile :D I love the people who are totally positive... hea that people?
Keep up the beyond awesome work!

I love this poem, it's so powerful, and the rythem is great. I love the line "Sweet Cleo succumb to its enticing bite." Wonderful poem. Keep writting.
Kat

Again, beautiful. You have such talent. I especially liked bringing in Cleopatra. *Goes to look at other works*

This was an interesting poem. I spent alot of time on it because I had to look up some words I didn't know what they meant. I normally never have to do that unless I am reading Poe. Once I figured them out, this poem came together well and I really enjoyed it. Keep up the great work.